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November 11, 2005

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neal wobbe

This is essentially a very stron post. The best part of the post is the depth of it. You went very deep into the issue and seemed to cover all points. Your thesis could be strong if it wasn't as long, if it was shorter to the point I think it would be more effective. Also if you combined the 3rd and 4th paragraph, since they are talking about some of the same points, it would be more effective. Lastly, your conclusion is decent but if you included parts of your thesis, it would wrap the pot up better. But overall, this was a very good post.

Chelstan Char

This is a very good group post. The thesis is very straight forward and tells the reader exactly how the group feels in regards to the outcome and why it happened that way. The textbook references are all very on point and add lots of depth to the background and historical context. My only critique would be to add textbook or link references to the second to last and last paragraph, because they seem lonely without them. Other than that, great post.

jpomeran

This paper was written well overall. The examples of the main differences in society’s view of women in the different centuries added a lot to the paper and helped to support the group’s viewpoint.
There was a lot of good evidence that would have led a jury to convict Lousia instead of Edward in a 20th century court system.
I particularly liked the paragraph about Clara’s deathbed declaration; in my opinion, it was the best example of the inaccuracy of the 19th century jury.
Watch your punctuation – the word “however” shouldn’t always be followed by a semi-colon.
In the second paragraph you could have included the reasons why you thought that Edward would have been found guilty in the 19th century, other than the fact that they would not convict his wife due to her gender.

Morgan Hall

The only thing that I would suggest about this post is in your conclusion, you need to tie everything up better. you need to refer to your first paragraph a little bit more. Other than that I thought this post was very well written.

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